More comments to read and heed!

As I pointed out at the beginning of a similar post last Friday:

This post consists of a collection of comments that I've posted in one section..., many of which are awaiting approval for publication on your blogs. I'd like to ask you to [publish those on your own blogs,] read them all through, and follow the advice, reminders, and suggestions that they contain – in all posts and commentary. 

(Comments for everyone to read and heed! May 20, 2011, ¶1; 

with ellipses and square brackets for changes since posting)

Though this list was for another section, §1C, the "advice, reminders, and suggestions" that I'm listing up here should inform one and all.  The comments below, like those in the previous list, appear (or will when approved for publication) on individual blogs. 


Again, comments that I've left on more recent posts appear toward the beginning of this list, and those I've left on earlier posts, toward the end. Also, a quick preview of the labels at the foot of this post will help you get ideas about the various foci, before you begin to read through all of the comments I've collected here.


If you have immediate concerns or questions about them, please voice them during our next class meetings (May 25, 2011). If concerns or questions occur to you later on, please post them in comments on this post.

Hi Emi, It is a pleasure to see you've gotten a start on your book reviews. However, I'm wondering: Is the content of this book review entirely original? That is, is it all your own ideas, in your own words? Rather than to retell stories, and spoil the endings for other readers, you should focus on what you thought and felt before, during, and after reading the books you review. That is, except for the juicy quotation at the beginning, you should write no more than you can remember with the book closed. Cheers, PB 2011年5月23日月曜日

Hi Yuka, It is a pleasure to see you've gotten a start on your book reviews. However, you seem to be forgetting to include juicy quotations and APA-style references in you book review posts. Please follow the examples in mock-up posts on the Writing Studio Blog (April 20, 2011). Cheers, PB 2011年5月23日

Hello again! Please remember to include at least three labels, too: "books, fiction, reviews, ...," to distinguish this sort of review from others, for example, such as music, restaurants, or websites. Cheers, PB 2011年5月23日

Hi Ko-hei, It is a pleasure to see that you are up to your fifth book review (BR). However, it isn't clear from the layout where paragraphs on different topics begin and end. You need to show readers where you're changing topics by putting blank lines between paragraphs in the body of your posts. You also need to review the quotation and reference in the example post on Writing Studio Blog (April 20, 1011), and add similar juicy quotations and APA-style references to all of your BRs. Cheers, PB 2011年5月23日月曜日9:09:14 JST

Hi Arisa, Thanks for sharing your impressions of this story. However, I'm wondering: Is the content of this book review entirely original? That is, is it all your own ideas, in your own words? Please let me know in class on Wed., May 25. Cheers, PB 2011年5月23日月曜日

Hi Natsumi, Great info. on certification and licensing exams? How do you say "eibei" in English? Cheers, PB 2011年5月23日月曜日

Hi Takahiro, When you write book reviews, rather than retelling stories, it is better to tell us what you think before, during, and after reading the books. Please leave the story-telling to the authors; tell us: why you chose the book; whether you liked it, and why (not); and for whom you recommend it, and why. Cheers, PB 2011年5月23日月曜日

Hi Yukina, Will you please shorten your name to "Yukina N...," and avoid spelling out family names in posts and comments from now on? I'd also appreciate your choosing darker text colors, or a lighter background, to make your posts and pages easier to read. Cheers, PB 2011年5月23日

Yuka, Thanks for all of the info. about the dance club. Now will you please do all of your readers two favors? First, please give every post you write a catchy an informative title of your own. Then please type line returns only between paragraphs, and then always type two.] Cheers, PB 2011年5月23日

Arisa, As Mr. T. instructed you to do for your first essay, and I've said in class, please spell out neither family names nor the name of the university in comments or posts. Please use "Arisa H...," or simply "Arisa ...," and "KGU" instead. Cheers, PB 2011年5月23日月曜日

http://baby-arisa.blogspot.com/2011/05/br-1-05-new-school.html#comment-form [recast of comment to emi, 2011年5月23日月曜日 (above)

Hi Sakarako, Would you please shorten your name to "Sakurako K..." in this and any other posts or comments in which you've spelled out your family name? Cheers, PB 2011年5月23日

L`Arc-en Ciel from Happy Days by Sakurako ///// Hi Sakurako, I gather listening to your favorite music helps you relax when you're tired. Where did you get the picture? Please let me know in class. Cheers, PB 2011年5月23日

Hi, Saori, I'm wondering: Is the content of this book review entirely original? That is, is it all your own ideas, in your own words? I'd also like to know why you used the labels "essays" and "outlines" instead of "fiction" and "reviews". Please let me know in class on Wed., May 25. Cheers, PB 2011年5月23日

ko-hei, Would you please shorten your friend's name to "Ryouhei S...," and do the same for any other family names in posts or comments – except authors' names in book reviews? Cheers, PB 2011年5月23日

Hello, Yudai. Perhaps you posted this before you got instructions from Mr. T. about your first essay. He has asked everyone to spell out neither family names nor the name the university, but you have in this post, and in another about him on April 17. Would you please remove them from existing posts, and avoid using them in any future posts? Cheers, PB 2011年5月23日

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